I don't like either way, honestly. Both lack the reason(s) behind the goal: Increase my salary- to match my skill level, to pay for Mom's operation, to buy an engagement ring. Move to a state with- more affordable housing, better weather, job opportunities for my spouse. The "why?" question is always good. I also don't like the over-specificity of your second form. Suppose it's ABC company that offers you a job, not XYZ. Did you fail to achieve your goal? By not asking why and over-specifying what, you lose focus. Move to a state with surfing leads to a project: R&D jobs in California and Hawaii. Now you can keep going: pick a state, or pick a kind of job, apply for jobs, arrange move, et cetera. The goal drives a succession of projects, and you need not know what they all are when you set the goal.
Originally Posted by Steven Edwards